Monday 15 October 2012


Little story

One long day i had nothing to do so my mum
 told me to go to the Butchers to get a duck.
So i wandered along And in a corner of my 
eye I saw .......


  

4 comments:

  1. I really like this as you've asked the public what should happen next. I think you can improve by adding more detail for the first paragraph.

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  2. It was alright but I think you could make it a bit longer

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  3. nice ideas but it should be a bit longer

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  4. i like the idea that you asked what happened next, but can you make it longer. i cant wait for the next bit

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