100 WORD CHALLENGE...
She always does it, gives me that look as if to say "who do you think you are?"
"I didn't mean to Mrs Bottomless" I cried to the teacher. She glanced at me and sneers. We were only playing on the ice when I accidently slipped and pushed Natasha over. Honestly, I think she was making a mountain out of a mole hill!
Saturday came and we trudged slowly and silently to ballet class but when we got there, we found Mrs Lazy lying on the floor, was she dead? Suddenly the temperature dropped and there I was, frozen. I couldn't think anymore, what happened?...
By Elise x
This is fantastic. Keep up the good use of descriptions. The suspense is nicely created. I wonder what happened next.
ReplyDeleteCongratulations, Elise, for being selected as a member of the 100WC Week #5 Showcase. :)
ReplyDelete@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia
Brilliant! I really like how you used suspense in this. I think you could improve by adding more detail, evan though it is the 100 word challenge.
ReplyDeleteI think this is FANTASTIC you used awesome vocabulary I love it
ReplyDeleteCoolio!
ReplyDelete*thumbs up* !!!!
I like this.
ReplyDeleteI really like it and you used good vocabulary
ReplyDeletereally cool elise and very attention grabbing
ReplyDeleteThat was astonishing! You used fantastic words such as accidently and honestly it was brilliant well done keep it up! :) :)
ReplyDeleteit makes me want to read more i loved it
ReplyDeleteSophie says; Fantastic writting. Congratulations on being showcased for the 100 word challenge.
ReplyDeleteAnaiya says; Its amazing I'd want to read more and find out what happens.
Well Done Elise. You Are Very Good At Writing Wonderful Stories And Keeping The Tension Up.
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